A Day in the Life of Jackie's Place: 12,045 Words
First another glimpse of the dreamscape that began the novel:
The wind rustles the tree tops, its
own song of whispers, of breath, of secrets. You know this language, it is the
tongue of your mothers and your mothers and your mothers. Listen to it, feel
its sweet breath even as yours leaves your body, then comes back in anew. Such
is the nature of breath, dear one. A death and a rebirth every moment, will you
pause and behold the simple wonder of living?
The trees dance to this music, swaying
in their own rhythm, their own time. They keep their own counsel, hold the
wisdom of years unknown, unseen. The richness of the earth holds their roots,
nourishes them, the gifts of the sweet earth traveling up, and up, and up
extending to the ends of their swaying arms as they reach hopeful fingertips
adorned in leaves toward the light of the sun. Nourished from below, held in
thrall and exalted by the sun. I see your lips curve into a smile and I see
that you feel this in your blood.
And what shall we make of this crow as she lands, bending the branches that will happily bear her weight? She screams with the rough voice of the crone, but it is sweet wisdom and blessings she imparts, will you hear them? Another joins, and another, and another. The branches bow and hold with the strength of ages. A cacophony, a chorus, and they call to you.
I know why you feel such sorrow. It is
our sorrow you feel, the grief of your people. The losses pile up and click
together like dry bones and you feel this in your heart, dear one. My heart is
your heart so I know this to be true. It is in you to feel this, such is your
gift, but do not let it become your burden, dear one. Lay down the sorrows of
the past that are not your own. Let the dead carry that which is theirs to
carry.
The light of the otherworld is dim. Do
not let it steal your light.
I don't quite know what has happened, but Jackie's Place has taken a turn toward the eerie. I decided that I would write a typical day at Jackie's Place (which is likely to take me at least another writing day), and I have to say... something seems really off about Jackie's Place from this vantage point!
She sets Jackie’s in front of him, and he pauses in his activity to
take a slug from the mug. He winces in appreciation, just as Dylann does the
same. They exchange smiles, then each turn their attention to the day’s early morning
tasks. Dylan reviews her notes from the previous day, frowning slightly at the
word scrawled on the page- she doesn’t seem to be able to make any more sense
of the notation than we were… but she moves on quickly. She doesn’t tend to
linger on things she doesn’t understand. She opens her laptop and pulls up the
document she saves at the end of each day, even though at the end of each day
it remains blank.
Jackie goes about
the business of pulling down each clean glass, polishing it with the filthy rag
that is always present in his hands or over his shoulder. The sparkle of the
glasses we perceived in the rosy glow of the morning sun has faded- they now
appear spotted with filth, smeared with lipstick imprints and fingerprints.
The music begins to
pick up the pace now, drums, and chords, and words and the bittersweet feeling
lingers.
Never was much of a romantic/I
never could take the intimacy/And I know it did damage/Cause the look in your
eyes is killing me…
The door opens and a man walks through. The light of day enters with
him, but only makes it a few feet before it is absorbed into the relative dimness
of Jackie’s Place. The man whistles a tune, and improbably, or perhaps
inevitably, it is the chorus of Runaway: and I always find yeah I always
find something wrong…
He wears a grease
stained shirt with the words ‘Virgil the Handyman’ emblazoned across the front.
Beneath this, it reads Virgil’s apparent areas of expertise: Tiling * Painting
* Drywalling * Decks and Fences. He carries a tool bag in his arm, and swings
it jauntily along with his whistle.
Without turning,
Dylann greets the man, who also seems familiar to her. “Hi Virge,” she says, “Can
I get you a cup of coffee?”
“You know I can never
turn down a cup of Jackie’s special roast,” he says with good humour. He is a
friendly man, you can tell. A happy man, with work to do that he finds fulfilling.
He has friends and family who love him, a home to return to, a dog to pet. All
of this seems very familiar to the three people in this tableau, as though this
were the same morning playing out every single day, rehearsed to the point of
rote repetition, and maybe it is. Maybe it varies slightly each day- maybe
sometimes it is Jackie who greets Virgil, or Dylann who polishes clean glasses
with a dirty rag, but it seems likely that some version of these events occurs
each day, and one thing is for certain, Virgil never does turn down a cup of
Jackie’s special roast. That would be against the rules. And people don’t like
to break the rules in Jackie’s Place.
“What do you need
today, boss?” Virgil asks, grimacing as he takes a sip from the steaming mug of
coffee.
“Well the lights
don’t seem to be working quite right today,” Jackie replies, his hands on his
hips as he looks around the bar. It is unclear what he means, since the lights
seem to be working perfectly. If anything, it is brighter than usual in Jackie’s
Place, which usually has something of a cavern-like aesthetic.
“I see what you mean,” Virgil replies with what I think we can now call characteristic good humour.

Whoa, what is this Jackie's Place? It feels familiar but like it has been turned ever so slightly off its axis. But I don't need it to be the same as always to love it. Great job in capturing the feeling of repetition and rote. Can't wait to find out more!
ReplyDeleteFor a bar that I always think of as unsettling, you've kicked it up a notch. Eerie is being generous to this version, it's absolutely chilling.
ReplyDeleteAnd that dream sequence, so beautiful. I can't wait to see how you weave together all these incredible worlds you've created.
I was thinking to myself that for Jackie, the lights not working at Jackie's Place probably means that it is too bright. And I guess I was right! Love the introduction of Virgil the Handyman. I shudder to think about what "Jackie's special roast" might be.
ReplyDeleteI just loved that first excerpt that you posted. You probably don't get tired of me telling you that your writing is beautiful. I certainly don't get tired of saying it! I especially liked this part: " know why you feel such sorrow. It is our sorrow you feel, the grief of your people. The losses pile up and click together like dry bones and you feel this in your heart, dear one. My heart is your heart so I know this to be true." You blend beauty, sadness, and incredible insights with your writing in a way that I just love. Way to go, Jill!!
You are building up a great atmosphere with your novel, Jill! Like others, I can’t wait to see where this goes. I don’t know if this was your intention, but the name Virgil got me thinking about Ancient Greek myths, there feels something archetypal about your story. Is Jackie’s Place the underworld??
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